Hello
If anyone has time can you go over to
http://www.tvtome.com/tvtome/servlet/PersonDetail/personid-14058/
I have been working on updating BK's bio page there. I need a second eye to tell me if I everything is spelled correctly and I haven't made any mistakes.
Thanks
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Biography:
Bruce Kimmel has had a long and varied career. He wrote, directed and starred in the cult movie hit, The First Nudie Musical. He performed those same duties on his second film The Creature Wasn't Nice (a.k.a. Naked Space), with Leslie Nielsen, Cindy Williams and Patrick Macnee. He also co-created the story for the hit film, The Faculty, directed by Robert Rodriguez.
COMMENT: In the second sentence you set off “The First Nudie Musical” with a comma; in the thirs sentence, you do not set off “The Creature Wasn’t Nice” with a comma. I would prefer a comma before “the Creature….”.
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He has also produced many off-Broadway and Broadway cast albums, including the hit revival of The King and I, starring Lou Diamond Philips and Donna Murphy, The Best Little Whorehouse In Texas starring Ann-Margret and Bells Are Ringing starring Faith Prince.
COMMENT:
Suggest”…King and I, (not .)….in Texas,…Are Ringing,…
NOTES:
• Bruce has his own website that he blogs every day.
www.haineshisway.com Also the Bruce Kimmel tribute site
www.brucekimmel.comCOMMENT:
“Blog is not a verb. After day there should be a comma, not a period. Need a period after .com (end of sentence). Might try: “Bruce has his own website,
www.haineshisway.com, on which he keeps a daily blog and maintains a dialog with his cyber friends. There is also a Bruce Kimmel tribute site,
www.brucekinnel.com.”
NEWS
Bruce has just finished his fourth novel Writer's Block. A murder mystery takes place during the new musical Bus and Truck.
COMMENT:
I would prefer: Bruce has just finished his fourth novel, Writer's Block; a murder mystery whose plot unfolds during the development of a new musical, Bus and Truck.
CREW CREDITS
Penn and Tellers' Bullshit - Associate Producer
COMMENT: s/b Penn and Teller’s
The First Nudie Misical – Writer
COMMENT: Musical, not Misical
“More Info” is a rehash of data already presented.
Acting Appearances:
M*A*S*H - Pt. Gilbert - Cease-Fire (1973)
COMMENT: Private is abbreviated PVT, or Pvt.
Penn and Tellers' Bullshit – Doctor
COMMENT: Again, Teller’s
Co Starring Roles
Tabitha - Adam - Tabitha (1976)
Never Say Never - Paul Walter - Pilot
Tabitha - Adam
COMMENT:
Tabitha listed twice.
der "no, I am NOT Cora" Brucer
NOTE: If I were like "some people", I would correct my idiosyncratic spelling of "third" and publicly protest my innocence - but I'm a slow learner.